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> Roses and Clovers, Clover plays a lesbian dating sim and gets hooked. Much to her dismay
TotallyMari
post Jan 21 2017, 04:43 AM
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Disregard my one other fanfic because today I'm starting anew. New continuity, new fics in that continuity, and more focus on fun or romantic stories. I put a lot of effort into this one so I hope you guys like it. z03.png
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post Jan 22 2017, 03:41 AM
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Good work! It was a lot better written than your previous work. I really want to see where this is going with Clover playing the game. Definitely looking forward to the next udpate!

Not too many mistakes, but I have to ask what does PGBR mean? Because those letters appear on one line of text in the fic.




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TotallyMari
post Jan 22 2017, 02:29 PM
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It was supposed to be a page break. I saw it in another fanfic and it was a good way to do a fast transition since i couldn't really find a way to write that scene. And thank you!




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post Jan 23 2017, 11:45 PM
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Cool, a new fanfic. And it being first-person Clover POV & in-progress makes it interesting...

One typo: 'My head hand reached'

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post Jan 24 2017, 01:09 AM
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Lol. That is a weird typo. And thank you. I enjoy your writing as well.




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post Jan 24 2017, 03:27 AM
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Damn, I wish I could write a story like that... very nice stuff so far. smile.gif





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post Mar 8 2017, 09:28 PM
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QUOTE (TotallyMari @ Jan 20 2017, 10:43 PM) *
Disregard my one other fanfic because today I'm starting anew. New continuity, new fics in that continuity, and more focus on fun or romantic stories. I put a lot of effort into this one so I hope you guys like it. z03.png


Ooooo, nice!
Hope you add more! Such a cliffhanger lol XD




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post Mar 26 2017, 01:37 AM
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New chapter up, Ill add the pdf to the original post so that people dont have to keep scrolling down. But I'll make a new reply so that people know it's here.
Also thanks to everyone who read it! 52 downloads feels great <3




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post Mar 26 2017, 02:25 AM
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QUOTE (TotallyMari @ Mar 25 2017, 08:37 PM) *
New chapter up, Ill add the pdf to the original post so that people dont have to keep scrolling down. But I'll make a new reply so that people know it's here.
Also thanks to everyone who read it! 52 downloads feels great <3


I'll read it soon when I get time! clovergif.gif




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post Mar 26 2017, 03:17 AM
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I can't wait to the next installment!
Lol virtual Clover hahaha.
Also a few typos: cold to could, our to out, and (one sentence confused me a lot) the "misc" sentence.
That Skyrim reference ~ though




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post Mar 27 2017, 04:25 AM
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Good setting & thought process descriptions!

Typos: when she tried to get (met=me)
character does (look) rather
box had (it’s=its) own

Really like how much detail you're going into w/Clover and how she perceives herself. Well done!




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post Apr 1 2017, 06:31 PM
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QUOTE (TotallyMari @ Mar 25 2017, 08:37 PM) *
New chapter up, Ill add the pdf to the original post so that people dont have to keep scrolling down. But I'll make a new reply so that people know it's here.
Also thanks to everyone who read it! 52 downloads feels great <3



Finally got the chance to read this (had to work a lot last week), it was shorter than I thought it would be though so maybe I should have read it earlier anyways. lol

Anyways, great work. Sets up the setting nicely and I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapter. Also I think this is a vast improvement from where your writing was several months ago. You've definitely gotten a lot better, and it shows. Nice work.




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